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Francesca Bossert's avatar

These are fun. I’ll have a go today!

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David Angel's avatar

OK, good. I'm glad it's me who's the dumb one! My sense of humor either grows on you or it doesn't.

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David Angel's avatar

Like a melanoma

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David Angel's avatar

Lol Whoosh! It was a joke CJ.

I don't know how to count.

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C.J. Heck's avatar

It was a tease, David. I bolded the words of your joke. “Count Dracula Sucks”. I thought it was brilliant actually.

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David Angel's avatar

My First Stab at Senryū

I don't know how to Count

Dracula was my math teacher

Public schools suck

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C.J. Heck's avatar

With either a Haiku, or a Senryu, you count syllables, David. Syllables are the same as beats —how many beats there are in a line. Your storyline is excellent!

I don't know how to Count = 6 Syllables

Dracula was my math teacher = 8 Syllables

Public schools suck = 4 Syllables

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I’m one who can’t Count (5)

Dracula was my teacher (7)

My public school sucks (5)

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Simone Senisin's avatar

I think these are sweet and funny … love the Napoleon complex 🤗

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C.J. Heck's avatar

Thank you, Simone. I love writing them. I’ve always loved a new challenge.

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Simone Senisin's avatar

💜

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Megan Youngmee's avatar

wonderful share. in love with the simple structure of the haiku. I had never heard the world senryu. is there are a difference between haiku and senryu?

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C.J. Heck's avatar

Hello Megan. Yes, there is a difference. Haiku is nature related, while the Senryu is about human nature and its shortcomings and foibles. They do still have the same 5/7/5 syllable structure. I love writing them as they're very challenging. ❤️💕

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Megan Youngmee's avatar

Thank you so much for clarifying. that makes so much sense. I’ve written both but didn’t know there was a distinction. Absolutely challenging. <3

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C.J. Heck's avatar

Challenging, yes, but so much fun to do.

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