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So much emotion packed into this short piece of writing. Wow.✨

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Thank you so much, Trudi. I’m glad you liked it.

I love the challenge of writing flash fiction. ❤️

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I need to try it!

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I encourage you to, Trudi. 😁😁😁

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Harry Chapin: "Take a Greyhound/it's a dog of a way to get around."

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Hahahahaha, good one, David!

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Great Writing , C . j . ,Sounds like it could of been a man that hit her and trust me no excuse for that .Yet could she have pushed him that far ? Sill no excuse and sitting in a bus station really does stink . Hugs and peace to you and your family

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Hello Mitch. Thank you for your kind comment.

Yeah, it was a man who did that. Still and all, even if she pushed him to the edge of the earth, he still has no right to hit her. Hitting is wrong from him or her. It’s just wrong.

hugs and peace

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No there isn't any excuse for it .C . J . , Yet to many men for many years have thought it is ok . Far from it guys . I had so many friends tell me i should of beat my ex . Never touched her . Hugs and peace CJ , hope all is OK there

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I’m glad to hear you feel that way. I didn’t think you were the type to do that. You’re so kind and gentle and that’s nice.

What did your ex do that your friends thought you should beat her for? That’s probably another whole story for after your personal story is finished.

No damage from the hurricane. Just leaves, branches, stuff like that all over the place.

hugs and peace, my friend.

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My ex , Who honestly i shouldn't of married . Slept with all my friends , band mates and neighbors CJ , Yet if i lift her she would of gotten the kids . So I stayed for almost 20 years . Hugs and peace and so happy no damage to your home

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I feel very sad for you, Mitch. Your friends should have known better than to hurt you like that. Friends don’t do that to friends.

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Honestly CJ , Was more worried about my kids . She would do it in front of them or start too .I worked next door too house they would call , I would take them to the park down the street or in woods behind the house . No sadness need it was a loveless marriage .

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Great piece, easily visual.

I am curious though on how you chose a Greyhound station for this. Greyhounds and cross country buses seem so out of date and inconsequential to the extent of not even having stations anymore. That said, having been in a few of the old Greyhound stations in days past, it’s a perfect setting !

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Thank you, Ken. Keen observation on your part! I deliberately chose Greyhound because I actually wrote the flash fiction story around the very last line, “Greyhounds may be late, but they don’t punch or yell.” That’s the first time I did that.

No other bus lines had a figurehead I could write it about, other than Peter Pan Bus Lines and that sounded too silly. (laughing)

Next I chose a black and white photo to go with it —hints that the story is from years ago.

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Ok, got it , thanks !

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😉😉😁😁

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